Mollie M. Assignment 7 rough draft

    Snow leopards are a very rare mammal, this is because they are endangered. They live in the mountains of Central Asia. They are very beautiful creatures, they have grey or white fur and have spots on them. Having this color fur and the spots help the Snow leopard blend in with the habitat they live in. Also the thickness of their fur and their long tails helps them stay warm through out the winter and fall seasons. Something that the Snow leopards have that is unique about them is that they have extra large paws to keep them from sinking into the snow. The snow leopards have very powerful legs so that they can jump far and catch their prey easier. 

    Snow leopards prey on blue sheep of Tibet and the Himalaya and they also prey on the mountain ibex. The snow leopards can kill animals that are three times their weight. Even though they can kill very large animals they still prey on small animals like birds or rabbits. The snow leopard is most active at night and scientists call this a “crepuscular activity pattern.” This changes depending on how many humans live in the area. Snow leopards are not violent to humans, the snow leopard is more likely to avoid any contact with a human. 

    Unfortunately, the number of snow leopards are decreasing because humans are killing them to invest in what companies want. A big reason why the snow leopards are endangered is because of their beautiful warm fur. This fur can be very highly priced, which is why companies kill them to sell it. Their fur is used to make many clothing items in Eastern Europe and Russia. Also, their bones and other body parts are being used for medicine in Asia. Mining activities have also been a problem for the snow leopards habitat. The miners use dangerous chemicals and  many explosives, this causes the snow leopards to relocate along with their prey.  

    There are many things being done to try to save the snow leopard. There are many organizations that have been set up that raise awareness and they raise money so that they can save this endangered animal. The organizations have ways that you can adopt a snow leopard and you will receive monthly updates on how your snow leopard is doing. By donating money to organizations for the snow leopard it helps the herders get the items they need to protect the wild life for the snow leopards. 

http://www.snowleopard.org/ 

http://animals.nationalgeographic.com/animals/mammals/snow-leopard/

Snow leopard

Comments

[Laura S]

Overall I think that you did a really good job on this paper, but I think that you need to check your second paragraph for grammatical errors and and run on sentences. Also elaborate more on the endangered species itself.

[Bre N]

Very good at giving the reader an overview of what a snow leopard is but like vice just consider putting more detail and information into the endangered species part. Overalls very good just reread and proofread!

[Hoa L.]

In overall this is a great and detailed essay about the snow leopard. Although since this is an essay focus on the endangered species, there should be less details about the species' character but more about how they are decreasing around the world. You should retread the essay in order to correct some grammatical mistakes.